Avens Dolor

Comments in red. --- Chloe Sibylle was short, but that was just a fact of life. She was fifteen and a half, a sophomore, and not a very good student. ...

Comments in red. All There Is Look both ways, make sure no one's watching. Turn the knob – don't let it creak – slip inside. Strip to your underwear, look ...

[s]Will get on these soon! School just started today and the RNC is in St Paul so things are craaaazy. Bear with me, please![/s] Done! Avens

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Comments in red. -------------- For a moment Brad opened his eyes. An unfamiliar face was looking down at him, wearing glasses and with dirty, tangled brown hair. Brad didn’t think ...

I'm back. The review on my first piece was awesome. Can you help be out again? Rip it to shreds please. I'd be delighted to! Unfortunately, my life is painfully ...

Thanks for requesting a critique! Comments in red. Out of Focus It's dark. The clouds hang low in the sky, painting the world like an old photograph. The sun can't ...

[s]I'll be getting right on to Out of Focus (likely will work on it tomorrow evening) and I've done everything up to that point.[/s] Done! I'm all caught up now. ...

Thanks for requesting a critique! Comments in red. -------- ‘Even if you are a minority of one, the truth is the truth.’ – Mohandas Karamchad Gandhi Drych-ddelwedd There was a ...

Thanks for requesting a critique! Comments in red. --------- 026: Round The ball started it all. What does this mean? I was just bouncing it. Really, that’s all I was ...

Thank you for requesting a critique! Comments in red. ----------- Aaron Hunter was dying. Strong first line. Everything had happened so fast. One moment, the slender 19-year-old had been crossing ...

My mailbox flipped out and I didn't even realize that these requests were here! I'll get to them first thing tomorrow morning! Avens

Okay thanks everyone, especially the line-by-line. Avens: I just had a few comments on some of the points you made. 1. When you were commenting on the note, I couldn't ...

Done!

Comments in red. --------- In the cold, dark alley, a small creature hunched, alone, freezing, soaked to the bone for the the night's cold, cold drizzle, and utterly miserable. Wayyyy ...